Tacticular Cancer: We'll have your balls

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Review And Book Review He Did

Discussion in 'RPG Codex News & Content Comments' started by Edward_R_Murrow, Jul 30, 2009.

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    Hmm. Surprisingly readable, although I'm sure I would have railed this despite coming from a book I like (Fight Club). Obviously this is assuming I am dumb enough not to notice it's fake with the anachronisms and names and whatnot.

    I feel like there is a lot lost in translation during the switch from FP/Present to 3P/Past... but not nearly as much as I had thought. Interesting.
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    obligatory

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    Sadly, I died in the 70s.
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  5. TNO Learned

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    Okay, seriously, wtf. is this 'tolling of a great bell' line coming from? I keep seeing it.
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    If we're to assume the narrator isn't paraphrasing, yes. But that's not how it is in the text.
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    Whoever wrote this, I think it's pretty bad. I'm no literary expert or anything, but the writing comes off as very clumsy in places, like when the writer suddenly stops his/hers descriptions of the events to tell us that a certain person is feeling such and such ("Wilhelm sat up. “Bastards, bastards! For the Maker’s sake, someone kill them!” He was a farmer’s son and used to handling horses. It really got to him." O rly?). But maybe it's true that associating this with Gaider makes it seem worse than it really is.

    What the hell, though, I still love hating that fat bastard.
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    Yes, but the original version was not third person, nor in the past tense..

    edit: prefer Hemingway for that matter
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    How would the sentence read if it was unaltered?
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    I posted links to the original text. They're on the previous page.
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    Those particular sentences change to:
    But ultimately it's not necessarily a sentence-level issue, although switching from present tense to past tense will fuck up a lot of syntax things—meaning the text, altogether, won't read as smoothly.

    The change from first person to third person results in some diction inconsistencies. For instance, it makes no sense for a third person omniscient narrator to say, 'It really gets to him,' where it might be perfectly acceptable for an established character/narrator to say that in certain situations. Certain things also have to be changed from second person to third person when you make the switch:
    becomes

    But there certainly is some validity to the argument. I mean, the line "We go pale." seems, to me, more powerful than "They all went pale." but it's hardly a game breaker. This could be showing our anti-Gaider bias, or how the perspective/pacing/context of passages effects our response to them, or a little bit of both. Hat tip to WanderingThrough2, IMHO. Took some balls and cracked open an interesting eggshell.
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    Dicksmoker's story.

    http://www.rpgcodex.net/phpBB/viewtopic.php?t=35438&highlight=critique
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    Or maybe just that the text itself isn't too well written. I read the original and still found the "... it really got to him" part unnecesarry.
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    ... Wow. Meme justified.
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    The book is great (Remarque, that is) but I've always thought that it is great because of the images it conjures up and the message it has, not its technical literary merits.
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    So you could say it's Remarqueable?
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    Never do that again.
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    I'd say it's fairly Remarqueable.
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    So this book sucks along the lines of a fanfic written about a hentai game "story" ?
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