Hello
PekkaK,
The gameplay video was looking really good and I was impressed with the coherence of the dialogue. There could be some tweaks there as far as the use of slang to get the points across. The dialogue is great and choices were good but for instance a black cellie named 'wiggly' generally wouldn't speak in such a proper way. Would be more like 'yo fish, heard you got clocked and you a lifer now. Listen clear bro, you seem alright so I'll check you on the block. The kitchen up past 4D but you get lost that way and the chicanos might take your ass, so you better suit up quick and keep your piece hooped, son. Shit is real around here. You want a different job and I'll put a word in but you best be bringin some extra shit back or we got problems...' and so on.
Another area would be in insults or instigating fights and this is just a general info and not related to the video specifically but the worst thing you can be called is a 'goof'. Someone calls you a goof and that's a go. If you don't fuck buddy up that instant or within a day or two then you're gonna be marked as a punk and probably get box thieved on the regular or bounced pretty quick. Another one is 'hound', someone calls you a hound and they're implying you're in on a skin beef and if you're in on a skin beef trying to be on general pop you're going to get fucked up and probably stabbed the shit out of at yard the day anyone finds out. Thats why whenever you touch a new block, the callers always want to 'check your papers' so they can see your charges. So if someone calls you a hound, and you're not, you're gonna have to smash buddy immediately or have a real hard time later on. Things like that, also whistling. Codexer's, don't ever go to jail and try and whistle a tune, just trust me on that one.
That kind of realism can only add to the game and wouldn't require any structural rewrite because your dialogue is already on point, it just needs that flavour.
There might be other tweaks that I could share as well that you could likely implement without too much input, such as always having the option to fight immediately for the bottom bunk and getting a slight bonus on rest as a result (its usually a few inches wider and you dont have to climb up and down to take a piss, etc). Thats the first thing you do when you get a new cell unless you like the guy. I personally prefer top bunk but I always smash someone who tries to pull a heavy on it anyway on principle. So for instance, even though Wiggly is your celly and he's helping you out, if he's on the bottom bunk and you want it when you walk in, there is only one way that can happen and you would still be cool after because he's not a punk, and of course he can just give it to you if you offer violence and so on. In my opinion you're going to want as much of that kind of thing as possible as the first prison rpg needs to be over and above.
I started a private conversation a while back on here when you mentioned interest in having us guys speak on the game so please look for that and check my credentials. You won't be disappointed and I'd like to volunteer some valuable time to do some of the tweaks I've mentioned or otherwise share more scenarios you can use, anecdotes, character studies of top criminals, things like that. Im 3 months in europe right now relaxing so I would appreciate if you will come to a decision sooner than later as I was planning on helping you out from when I first sent the pm but overall things are starting to get busy again and for the time being at least for now I can put some time on helping you out.
Haba, i know this fantasy is out there but so you know some lifers and long timers do take bitches or otherwise try it out once or twice but always behind close doors. Any kind of flagrant gayness outside of jokes is going to get you bounced from the block at best and horribly disfigured or killed at worst. Generally, you'd probably get whats called around my way a 'buck-6-5" whereby you get your cheek sliced out like the joker with a tuna can lid while you're sleeping or really while you're awake and standing in line for grub, depends how big you are. Thats a scarlet letter you dont want. Thats why you hear the homies calling it being on the 'down low' because anyone at the top finds out and you get fucked right up and might never make it home. Also, please use spoiler tag, thank you.
So Pekkak, definitely have some scenarios in there where you have to fight for your life one way or another in that way but please avoid overt faggotry wherever possible. It just doesn't fly like that in general pop.
Forgive me, I wrote five times more than I intended but overall looking very good as is and looking forward to hear from you soon, all the best.
