MaskedMan said:
Some more minor errors, still playing as half-orc female:
Thanks, turns out you're an excellent tester!
MaskedMan said:
- When talking to Loghaire in exile, in his answer to line 283 he mentions the Glimmering forests . I think this should be changed to Glimmering Forest; it seems to be the custom, it's what the VO says, and he refers to it as a singular forest later in the same dialogue bit.
Fixed.
MaskedMan said:
- The half-ogre villager in "The Thirsty Soul" in Stillwater is a little inconsistent; He greats you with a "What you want?!", typical unintelligent dialogue, and then proceeds to either dismiss you, harass you, or turns out to be an agent of The Molochean Hand (BTW, he asks if you are "that fellow "who survived the blimp crash, should probably be lady or woman, it seems like every Molochean Bar-agent has this issue), all of these with normal int dialogue. You should have a look at his stats and decide whether he is intelligent or not.
Well, it seems he's a retard. I can add a point or two in IN to him, but is it really needed? And about "fellow", could you suggest a female line? Here's the whole line "Hey! You're that fellow who survived the blimp crash! I read about you in the Tarantian!". BTW, the half ogre actually uses a generic dialogue for pub thugs, so take it in consideration as well.
MaskedMan said:
- A lady in the same bar is referred to as "he" ("[He takes your 500 coins.]") after a game of wits. The question was "what are Dernholm and Tarant part off" or something similar, the right answer was "The Unified Kingdom"
The Game of Wits is another generic dialogue and it has no check for NPC's gender, so all lines in it are written for a male NPC. Heavy modification will be needed. Moreover, there's around 470 lines of the dialogue, containing around 60 instances of "he takes". Better leave it as it is.
MaskedMan said:
- Richard Leeks, the blacksmith of Stillwater:
- Line 18 "Surely men of reason...",
- His response to line 80, "Are you questioning my skill son..."
Please suggest female lines.
MaskedMan said:
- His response to line 81, "I do seem work around his place...",should be "some"
Fixed.
MaskedMan said:
- In the rumor concerning him Drog Black Tooth is referred to as Drog Blacktooth, both in conversation and in the logbook, and his key is called "key do Drog Blacktooth's cage". Since the character is named Drog Black Tooth, and that is what he is called in conversations with Cyrus and Leeks, you might consider changing those.
Well, it's trivial, but I guess I'll change it.
MaskedMan said:
- Gildor Nightwalk refers to Tannon Wroughtbringers journal as a "letter" in response to line 106 and 131.
Fixed. There were even two instances of "letter".
MaskedMan said:
- Brigitte, her response to line 261: "No one can be forced to do what is not in there heart", should be "their"
Fixed.
MaskedMan said:
- Willoughsby, his response to line 112: you are not "the man we are looking for" - unless this quest is open to male characters only this should be corrected
Please suggest a female line.
MaskedMan said:
- Heinrich Jenks:
- His response to line 65: "members in the unified kingdom", should be of ?
Hmm.
MaskedMan said:
- His response to line 107: Two men, strangers really..."
Please suggest a female line.
MaskedMan said:
- His response to line 47: "It's a wise manwho looks at what is before his eyes..." (could be more of a saying I suppose, you decide)
I'd like to hear other opinions on this. The converstation goes like this:
NPCtoMalePC: You see...you walked into Willoughsby's office only a little while ago, and now you're privy to delicate, national information. Not that I don't appreciate your candor in the matter, my friend. But, don't you feel that it's just a little strange? NPCtoFemalePC: You see...you walked into Willoughsby's office only a little while ago, and now you're privy to delicate, national information. Not that I don't appreciate your candor in the matter, my friend. But, don't you feel that it's just a little strange?
PC:Yes...that does seem a little bit odd...
NPCtoMalePC: It's a wise man who looks at what is before his eyes. You and I might have more in common than you think, friend...NPCtoFemalePC: It's a wise man who looks at what is before his eyes. You and I might have more in common than you think, friend...
MaskedMan said:
- His response to line 137: "need of men like you.."
Please suggest a female line.
MaskedMan said:
- After visiting Quintarra and talking to the silver lady I try to report my progress to Bates. I can tell him that the Wheel Clan banished BMC by order of the elves, but when he asks "Well, what do the elves have to say about all of this?" my only option is to say farewell. Shouldn't I be able to tell him about the dark elves and the prophecy?
The line "They blame it all on the dark elves" appears only after you've found the village of the dark elves. Maybe it really should appear after you've accepted the quest of finding it though. Not sure about this one.
P.S. More shots of Clockwork Decoys:
In action (creatures, original palettes):
Turned off (items, my palettes):
I think the colors are pretty much spot on.